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Post by jordicus on Apr 21, 2013 18:14:27 GMT -5
I don't suppose any of you guys could link me to any good tag team rp's I can learn from? I really feel like I need massive improvements.
Also, if you could reply with any ways you think I need to improve, and an example of how to do it compared to how i usually do it, that would be a massive help.
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Post by Dani on Apr 21, 2013 22:31:47 GMT -5
I'd give you my Mariah Lopez RP from this round as example one. And there are some other really good tag team RP's I'll give here as examples. A note that all RP's are done by those in the PCW Hall of Fame so you know it will help haha. Example OneExample TwoExample ThreeExample FourExample FiveExample SixAs for your RP's as a whole. I did say in the thread that Lekkter made about you being way better than you were when you were in the fed when we were on the My Wrestling Forum days (that's been forever and a day ago), and I still stand by that. Your RP's are WAY better than they were then. That doesn't mean you don't have room to improve as I do believe you have a ton of room to do so. Grammar's gotten better. It's not perfect, but a few space bars between some of the commas would do some good, and also when you end a paragraph, the enter key is useful in that regard. I also believe you could beef up the promo portion. It's not bad for starting out, but as you face the more tougher competition (the tag team division has some pretty strong teams), you'll have to add more to really keep up. I would also maybe add in some development as well, like letting the reader know who The British Classholes are (like how did Buzz and Zack meet and etc). The simple things that can make one's character interesting and awesome. Keep in mind I'm usually not good at this so me explaining it may have dragged but that's just how I think of it.
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Post by jordicus on Apr 22, 2013 11:16:05 GMT -5
Thank you , that helped alot and i'll try use your advice to improve again , thank you
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Post by Dani on Apr 23, 2013 14:34:56 GMT -5
You're welcome. Glad to help and don't be afraid to ask anybody around for advice. Learning and taking any type of good and solid advice will only help you going forward.
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