dj03
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Post by dj03 on Aug 5, 2013 20:00:06 GMT -5
You know what to do, ladies and gentlemen.
Any feedback is greatly appreciated!
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Post by Dani on Aug 5, 2013 23:36:20 GMT -5
Hmm. Straight and to the point. I do like the interaction between Derek and James... although I'm curious to know just what and how their friendship came about. You know, develop them two a little bit (James could be DJ's sidekick of sorts or corner man).
Overall for your writing style, it's not bad and sometimes being straight and to the point works, but I do see room for improvement as you further along (especially if you enter a title picture, those competitors aren't exactly easy to combat).
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