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Post by Syn on Sept 11, 2013 23:01:45 GMT -5
Again, I was off for a week and kinda struggled with this RP, so I want to know if it was up to par, or if it needed improvement. Any constructive criticism is welcome.
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Post by stryker on Sept 11, 2013 23:06:39 GMT -5
That was off? Jesus I don't want to face you when you're on.
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Post by Syn on Sept 11, 2013 23:28:34 GMT -5
No, I meant I took a break the last round and because of that, I was struggling with this RP, Yo. =P
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Post by Brytain Montgomery on Sept 11, 2013 23:30:27 GMT -5
This was the farthest thing from "off" ever. Thinking that this is "off" is the reason why I yell at you. This was probably one of your best, in my opinion. Syn was equal parts human and at the same time, still very imposing and scary as hell. The exposition... where you gave pieces of the back story with Syn and Morgan was enough for someone who may not have obsessivelygonebackandreadwaytoomanysynrps*cough* to know what was going on but it was woven in with the current story in an artful way that not even a lot of published writers can manage. It didn't feel heavy at all, which is always my chief complaint with exposition. The BrySyn scene was awesome... though I may be a smidge biased there since Brytain automatically makes things 50% more awesome just by existing Syn's promo was badass. You've always been good at the "talking" part, as I call it but you've been getting a helluva lot better at the description, if that makes sense. I could seriously see everything in my head from the way you described it and the different moods that you introduced with each scene. Overall, please may I never, ever have to RP against you. Thanks. :3
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Post by Dani on Sept 12, 2013 0:56:09 GMT -5
This was far from off in my opinion. Everything seemed to click nicely. The tone, the descriptions, everything. It was one of your better ones in all honesty, Tom. Makes me kind of scared of Anarchy. But it was a great read.
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